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the real fight by hiritai the real fight by hiritai

This guy has been through a big re-working. Character, appearence, blahblahblah. Trying to work him in with my other characters without changing the story was my aim, and I'm pretty sure this will work.

Deja 'Mystic' Sunder is his name, and rare/dangerous/powerful/mythical/historical artifacts are his game. Living in an ancient mine on the side of a mountain, Mystic has built an enormous library of secrets and other dangerous things. He keeps to himself, mostly, only sharing his hoard if you have something he wants more than whatever he already has (in which you'd better want more than anything else if you're climbing that damn mountain for just five minutes of his time).

Aside from that, he's done a lot of hunting. He'll hunt anything if the money/reward is good.

Mystic also thinks he is haunted by the ghost of his father, which inhabits a painting... when, really, he's just a bit nutty.

I actually bought him a dark brown wig, but I kind of maybe like this one better. Which is an expensive boo-boo, considering this one had been lying around for months :/ Kind of don't want him to have grey hair, but he looks so damn good in it x.x


Mystic is a Crobidoll Lance from [link]

Please read my FAQ before asking any questions! Thanks for looking <3
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Hm... Keep in mind that I'm not a very talented artist myself, but I'll do the best I can. Definitely keep the grey wig. This is from an artistic stand point, and not based on anything else, but if you decide that he, as a character, needs a brown wig, go for it. A brown wig, however, would have made this picture look more harsh, whereas the grey gives it an overall soft tone that works nicely with his resin color, the lighting, and his face sculpt, which is a soft expression.

His face is in focus, and that's very good, because you want the emphasis on a portrait to be on the eyes, and the viewer's attention is drawn to it because his face is really the only thing definitely in focus. The placement of the pendant just above his hands is nice, and the dark pendant is a great contrast to the lighter tone of the piece.

Now, the negatives, of which I have no background training to help you with, this is just my opinion. His hands are out of focus, and my eyes keep looking at them, hoping each time that they will become more focused. I really don't know what that would do to the overall piece, but that's what I've been doing. Also, and I could be wrong on this, but I would double check and make absolutely sure that both his eyes are facing in the same direction. It could just be the angle, and I didn't notice it at first, but it looks like the eye covered by hair is looking just slightly more to the viewer's left than the other eye.

Other than that, great doll, great picture, keep up the good work!
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What first got my attention was his eyes and the calm expression. It's funny, because before I read your artist commet one of the few words that came to my mind was "mystic". And that word deffiantly fits the whole piece. The soft and simple colours help make it more enchanting. More magical. If the colours were more bright, vibrant, and a wider variety, I don't think it would have jumped out as much to me in your gallery. Most pictures I usually see are pretty colourful (for the most part), and it's not very common to see pictures with 99% pale colours. But I do like how you have just a little hint of some other colour. And I think it's good how you chose a dark colour at that, helps balance the colours and not make it too pale.

I also like the posture he is in. I'm not really sure how to describe it but without reading the artist comment I could make a pretty cool interpretation of this piece and just makes me think. I think the brown wig would look pretty good if he had that instead of the grey, but I think it would have added too much colour and would have taken somthing away.

His eyes also draw you in fast with the way the light reflects off his dark eyes. And his eyes keep your eyes there for a few seconds, and even after it still keeps drawing you back.

Also another opinion: I think this kind of picture could look good with a guy or girl.

Well done. :)
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candygirlcandice Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2009   Interface Designer
are u sure its a he?looks like a her..
RetroNinja Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
This photo is amazing. He looks like an angel. Love the quality and the detail. It's so breath-taking and amazing. I could look at the photo for hours in awe. *____*
SierraTheCat Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
I thought he was a girl! Gorgeous!
misaki-lan Featured By Owner May 29, 2009
I've seen lots of lance, and Mystic is my favorite one. He's so cute and temperate. I cannot even describe how greatful and tender he is in words. I personally think he's the most gorgeous lance I've seen.
Akatsuki-No-Adriane Featured By Owner May 28, 2009
omg i thought it was a girl but hes still really gorgouse!!
koosha Featured By Owner May 30, 2009  Professional General Artist
word. :D
Akatsuki-No-Adriane Featured By Owner May 30, 2009
KuRumi-FlameSamurai Featured By Owner May 27, 2009
Waaaaaaaaa!!! *dies* I love it so much :heart:!!!
PestSunny Featured By Owner May 27, 2009
nice job . ;D
xXxHXCxCassandraxXx Featured By Owner May 16, 2009
gorgeous! :3
LidLuvsU Featured By Owner May 6, 2009
Ohhh pretty =]
Echoes-of-Elaris Featured By Owner May 6, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, what an intriguing story. I can't wait to learn more about him.

*hints at Mysticfics*
Ran-ras Featured By Owner May 4, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
he's BEAUtiful.
yeah, grey hair looks good on him... but he looks like one of ur dolls.. he looks exactly like him..(sorry forgot the name) so the idea of changing his hair is not a bad idea... try it make him as graceful like him being in gray hair. ^^
Kitrina-the-Great Featured By Owner May 3, 2009
I really the face paint, especially the detail in the eyes.
RiKkU-DA-THieF Featured By Owner May 3, 2009
Oh wow, that looks brilliant. So pretty.. --pokes wig--
His faceup is so --squeeee--

And on another completely unrelated note, what the sheet is this "Critique" crap? Like we need a Premium account to write critique about a work :\
What a load of shit XDD
BloodyRose90 Featured By Owner May 2, 2009
It's so beautiful! I really adore your work :D
Kingpoof Featured By Owner May 2, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautifull. It looks so innocent ^^
simonthefish Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2009   Writer
I swear to god, every time you change his look I love him more.
Tomoe21 Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2009  Professional Interface Designer
where it's the "buy this print" button!!!! i love it!!!!!!!!!!111
asterlei Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2009
Oh, he's so exquisite. Amazing. Stunningly beautiful and astonishingly breathtaking. I love it.
TiedByLove Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2009
he looks very wise and patient! if the string wasn't there, he could be holding something out, or taking something. :D great job!
yurecia Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2009
Hahah, I would climb the damn mountain to see such a pretty guy. Lovely expression he has there.8D
DeidaraSenpai Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2009
Oh My God It's...BEAUTIFUL
nejilover1601 Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
I like this one as well as the others. You really must have a lot of cash to dish out for them, but that's the dedication you got, which makes things really good on your end, cause it's worth it, right?
Serihalt Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
the pose is really wonderful
i love the hair and the beautiful face...:heart:
MorganJordan16 Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2009
oh this is SO good....and so creative. i'm beginning to fall in love with it....its great! but most of all, i love the facial expression on his face. its the most important and the most meaningful in this. its the key and the thing that really makes this.

Great! :wow!:
Meeeo Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
he's just perfect with gray hair :heart:
Gee-Nius Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
Holy shit he's looking amazing! ^^

The bio is awesome~
I love the new Mystic *3*

Well done c:
Lann-eh Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2009
That hair is perfect
It suit his face up
And this the character you've come up for him he seems almost dusty like the things he collects? - and pale enough to be in a mine without really seeing the sun.

I think this is a good character for him :)
mc-shit Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2009
his face! Such a serene look! Gorgeous! I love his lips ^_^
ilmenhin Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I love this photo, =hiritai! Mystic looks gorgeous!
luthienyavetil Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2009  Student General Artist
It matches his eyebrows well. ^^ The gray does. Though he doesn't have that same look as he did with the darker one.

C8 But he's still, and always will be, freakin gorgeous.
ShinkonoKokoro Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
He does look incredibly fantastic in that silver/gray wig. I really like it. It seems to suit him.
HakaiAkumu Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2009  Student General Artist
bounty hunter mystic, i like that idea.
maybe you should give that brown wig a try, not the grey one looks bad, on the contrary it looks great on him, but he kinda looks like sephiroth to me if i stare a lot .x. maybe its the eyes i dunno...
Armadas Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2009
I really hate repeating what others have already said but Mystic is the most beautiful Crobi Lance evAr! Definitely worthy of a first place prize for your well composed photographs. I'm so glad he was awarded to you, since I'm positive there will be an inundation of his pictures <3 His face-up looks flaw-less and matches perfectly with his new wig! It makes me happy seeing him in my watch box xD
The-Lady-Blue Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2009  Student Photographer
He looks so amazing. I love his face and those eyes! Wow!
MyVizmXXX Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2009
so pretty~ i love the hair!
maybe brown would be better tho...? i love how you tied his hands! ah its so cool! :D
Modsoul123 Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2009
Whoa, big character reworking there! But still sounds real awesome.

Eyes are gorgeous *A* and the grey wig does suit him, but it would be cool to see Mystic as a brunette. ^^
bananabonita Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2009
oh emm eff gee, beautiful!
silent-visions Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2009  Student General Artist
This wig makes him look quite ethereal and intriguing at the same time. Also his neclace is so eye-catching.

Speaking of the photo itself, I love how colors here are so peaceful and warm. That adds a lot of atmosphere to the photo.

...and Crobidoll Lance is such a beautiful mold <3
CheeseCakeAlchemist Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2009
*Climbs up the mountian, knocks on his door, then asks if she can borrow a cup of sugar*

Me: *hides*
SludgeCity-SteviMay Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2009
i like the grey wig too. i love these dolls they are so fascinating!
Midnights-Blossom Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2009
I love it! Beautiful <33
FlamingStar129 Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2009
I do love that wig on him more so then the other! ^__^
Junkura Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2009
He's beautiful, I love him
Xeonix Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2009
He looks like a she o.O
atobira Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Indeed... He looks good.
Better than before.
upirlichy17 Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2009
i think he'd go well with a unicorn or something, i love mystic. he looks like dream. i love!!!
OrenMiller Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2009
I don't know if you want to make this effect, but I find that the wig seems to be so realist contrary to the face with this sort of white glow... So the wig seems to be human and the doll angel...I don't know if i explain what I mean very clearly lol but I love this effect ^^
randomsquad Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2009
you finally decided on a story for Mystic lol where did you get that gorgeous wigg from?? x
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